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By Ken Ebright
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"Achoo."
Mom rushed over and felt the head of her baby. "Joseph, there is something wrong with the baby. He's burning up, we need to go to the doctor."
Joseph smiled. "The baby just sneezed; there is nothing wrong with him."
"I know my son, he's sick."
"Mary, you're a worrywart."
Mary scampered about looking for clean clothes for the baby. "Our baby is really sick."
Joseph rolled his eyes. "The dogwood trees have just started blooming. He probably just has an allergy. He'll be okay."
Mary leaned into Joseph's face. "My son needs to see a doctor!"
"Okay, okay, we'll go."
Joseph stomped off and got things ready. Mary bundled the baby, and then they scurried off to the doctor's house. Mary grabbed the baby and sprinted to the doctor's front door.
Mary pounded on the door screaming, "Help!" Finally, a gray-haired lady answered. Mary burst through the entryway. "There is something wrong with my son. We need to see a doctor right away."
"Come in, the doctor is seeing another patient right now; it'll be a few minutes. Please have a seat. The lady motioned toward the chair."
Mary's hands shook. "You don't understand, my son is really sick."
The lady's rolled her eyes. "Ma'am, I only can do so much; we'll get to your son as soon as we can. Please have a seat."
Joseph put his arm around her shoulders. "Honey, calm down you're blowing this out of proportion."
Mary's face turned red. "No Joseph you don't understand I'm really scared!"
With Joseph's arm around her. He guided her to a chair. "Mary, please have a seat."
About a half of an hour later, they were moved to another room. The doctor walked in.
"How are you doing today? What symptoms does your child have?"
Tears flowed from Mary's eyes. "My son is sick. He sneezed."
"Okay we'll check him out. The doctor put his ear to the baby's chest and listened to his breathing. " There is nothing wrong; I think he has an allergy."
"See honey, I told you. Thanks Doc." Joseph shook the doctor's hand.
They left the doctor's house and headed home. "Mary, you're a worrywart. You know what the scripture says about worrying, it weighs a person down."
A vein throbbed on Mary's head. "Joseph, I don't need you to quote scripture to me. I know what the Bible says."
Mary rolled her eyes. "If he's God's son then he's supposed to be perfect. Why does he have an allergy?"
"Mary, Jesus was conceived by the Holy Spirit. God has a purpose for him. He's not going to let anything bad happen to him."Joseph put his arm around his wife. "He is perfect, but he came to earth to experience life as a man."
Mary hung her head. "I'm the mother of the Lord; I don't want to shirk my responsibility."
"Don't worry you're a perfect Mom. Everything will be okay." Joseph embraced Mary.
Author's note: scripture is from Proverbs 12:25
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You had quite a few little errors (mainly with quotation marks) but hopefully they don't subtract from the story. I always enjoy a good twist and you kept me going with this one. You covered the topic in a fun, fresh, and meaningful way. Great job of stepping outside of the box with your POV.