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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Singing (10/31/05)
Changing from a private office to a public cubical and moving away from close friends, the rest of the work place had finally turned its back on her or so she felt. Her surroundings and friends had changes so much that she became empty and void of emotion. Keyboarding and filing in automatic mode drained her of all gratification of a job well done. Knowing that God had a purpose and a plan for the changes that He made at work didn’t bring the comfort she longed for. She remained in a constant state of confusion and discontent. Feeling harassed at every level and overwhelmed with the workload and no support, she sunk deeper and deeper into a pit of stress developed panic. Quitting wasn’t a choice. She had to work it out and get God’s peace on the situation. But how? God was silent.


****

“Perfect. We have her just where we want her, hopeless and desperate.” Said the Spirit of Oppression. “She is a pathetic mess! Look at her. Don’t let up!” It commanded its comrades.

“You’re worthless! We hate you! You’ll never fit in around here. You can’t do anything right. They should have fired you when they fired everyone else.” Masquerading behind different people in the office words were spoken to her by familiar spirits.

****

Sitting at the kitchen table with her head in her hands she asked, “Lord, where did I go wrong? I thought this move would be a good move, but it has turned into a complete disaster. Everyone hates me; my witness has been completely ruined. I only wanted to be a good witness for you.” She cried out to her only hope. Again, there was silence. Breathing in a heavy sigh of grief, “Lord, if I could only hear you. If you would only speak to me so I could hear you, I’m feeling desperate. I need you. I need your guidance.” Tears streamed down her face in utter distress.


Moving away from the table, she reached over and turned on her CD player. She popped in her favorite Darrel Evan’s CD and let it minister to her. Calming her fears as it has so many times before, she began to relax. The Lord began to speak, ever so softly, nudging her to do what she had been fighting to do for days. Forgive.

Bowing before the Lord, brought transformation to her spirit. Tearfully and fearfully, she asked His forgiveness and strength to forgive those that hurt her. As she made her request to the Lord, her heart began to soften. Compassion filled her once empty heart for those that hurt her and the Joy of the Lord came back. She felt empowered from on High. Standing with her hands raised she began singing praises to the Lord and gave thanks.

****

“NO! What is she doing! Give her more sadness, more hopelessness more desperation…Get her!” Screamed Oppression.

“We can’t touch her anymore. Can’t touch her at all. Nope, no touching. Nothing but the blood…” One demon was explaining when he was interrupted by Oppression.

“Shut up! Don’t say that name!” It yelled.

“Well, that is what she is singing and that is why we can’t touch her. Now, what would you like us to do?” It asked Oppression.

“Go find another victim. Our work here is finished. He has once again, stepped in to help the broken hearted.” Sneered Oppression.

****

“Nothing but the Blood of Jesus. Nothing but the Blood of Jesus.” She sang, with the heavenly choir singing in the background. Tearstained face full of joy and peace singing praises to her Lord finally free.
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terri tiffany
11/07/05
Wonderful story! The fist sentence was a little long..I may have reworked it ..but such a good concept! Loved it.
Michelle Burkhardt
11/08/05
I liked your story and the concept of the demons talking. I was a little confused with the first paragraph, I had to read it twice. The rest went smooth. Nice Job.
Phyllis Inniss 
11/08/05
Quite good. Your entry shows how our thoughts can affect our mood and our happiness. When we turn to the Lord with a new attitude, he turns our sadness into joy.
Jan Ackerson
11/08/05
I agree: re-work the first paragraph for clarity, and give her a name. The concept of the demons working her over is superb, and superbly crafted. Thanks!
Diane L. Harris
11/11/05
You need to work on the grammar, spelling, and the "flow" of the first paragraph. Starting with paragraph two, the story really picks up. All you need is practice. You have so much to say. Keep writing. Keep writing. I'm serious - keep writing.
Anita Neuman
11/11/05
Be encouraged, dear Doreen. You are definitely on the right track! You've started with a great concept, and worked it into a fabulous story! Your character was very realistically portrayed, too. Great job!
D. Phenes
11/13/05
Creative, realistic entry.. Makes ya think..
Thanks for sharing..
Karen O'Leary
11/13/05
Creative. I like the idea of different sections. Maybe you could start out with the second section as an attention-getter? The first paragraph is a little long--maybe break it up a bit. Best wishes with this piece.