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Topic: Astonishment (02/02/12)
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“I had no idea what was happening, Jane. No one told me…and to think I’m on the social committee – I should have been told first.” Margaret stared down at Betsy to let her know she was onto what Betsy was thinking about her.
Betsy hesitated a moment then said with pleading voice, “Oh Jane, you couldn’t possibly think I thought…oh gosh, we’ve been friends forever!”
Jane laughed with a crooked smile, “Of course not, why would you think that. You’re such a nice Christian lady.”
Betsy swallowed hard. “Well, all I can say is it’s a disgrace that she prances around in church acting holier than thou; didn’t she know people would find out what she was doing?”
“Well, you know how that goes, Betsy. Some people have no conscience whatsoever!” Jane waved her hand in the air in disgust, dismissing the very thought of what she had learned about Nicole.
Just then Nicole enter the café, apparently from the Lady’s room right behind Betsy’s and Jane’s table, after having overheard part of the conversation.
Betsy and Jane’s faces turned red with embarrassment as Nicole passed by their table. In an effort to redeem themselves, Jane asked Nicole to join them.
“Yes, please do join us, “Betsy said as her voice cracked in nervousness.
Nicole’s eyes teared up. “No, thank you. I wouldn’t want to ruin your reputations; after all, I’m just the town slut. But just to set the record straight – I’ve only be seeing Mr. Walhart because he is trying to learn to dance to surprise his wife for their 30th wedding anniversary.”
Nicole walked away with her head down and stripped of her dignity. Would she ever be able to live this down in the community?
Jane and Betsy were busy consoling each other as if they were innocent in the entire matter. “Well, how were we to know she was right behind us?” Jane said.
“And anyway, I heard it from Janet, who heard it from Lisa, who saw them together at the dance studio,” Betsy added.
“Well, perhaps they should have been more discreet?” Jane shrugged.
OR PERHAPS BETSY AND JANE SHOULD NOT HAVE BEEN GOSSIPING, BECAUSE THAT’S THE SAME AS JUDGING YOUR NEIGHBOR!
“Judge not, that you be not judged. For with what judgment you judge, you will be judged; and with the measure you use, it will be measured back to you.” Matthew 7:1-3
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When I saw you used the word, astonishing in the first sentence my first thought was you were trying to make the story fit the topic. That is a common mistake many people make. Though you did touch on the topic, the whole story really wasn't about astonishment but gossip. It's a tricky line to walk.
You did a nice job building the characters. You had an intriguing start. Your message was clear and right to the point. The scripture you used to back it up was a great fit too.