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I agree that this is a well written poem. Good in line and meters with rhyming sceeme too. Great job!
This was me this afternoon! :-) This is a really well written poem and sums up life in today's world so well. It is so hard to avoid the distractions that bombard us all day, every day; not all bad things, but things that take our focus away from our 'dad' (I loved that you called God 'dad'!). Well done.
I love the message and the way you rhymed it all. Very clever.
Very nice message for the busy pace we all seem to face today.
The way you wrote this was excellent as it even had that rush rush feel to it. I think your MC has the same problem many of us do, but praise the Lord God is patient and has time for us....if we just slow down, stop, look and listen. Good job!!
What a great poem. I am not a writer of poems and struggle to rhyme anything. Great job. Enjoyed it immensely. :)
Ah this is too funny...and too true!