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It sounds like the MCs attitude shifts toward hope at the end of the story. I had a little trouble following the scene shifts throughout the story. It might help if you could put separaters in to make that more clear. Thanks for sharing the story with us.
10/26/09
Interesting story. The MC needs to learn to laugh again.
10/27/09
I was a bit confused by the first paragraph--what happened three weeks ago, and what happened three decades ago. If she's been in a snit for 30 years, why on earth did Miles marry her?

You did a wonderful job at portraying the blackness of her mood and of her soul. Hope her long-suffering husband can pull her out of it. Love that last spectral image, too.
I was a little confused at the beginning of the story but her mood never wavered. How sad not to find joy, peace and happiness. Thanks for sharing.