The Official Writing Challenge
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07/30/09
this is lovely. I feel like I am floating down the river. Such beautiful descriptions . A little footnote about where this river is would have been good unless you want to keep it a secret of course!
08/01/09
I don't get the rhythm and meter that usually comes with rhymed poetry...but I like the product anyway. Nice job, but could use a little work on giving it a smoother flow...

Nice read. Keep up the good work.
You have a very good way of using words to your advantage! Great poem!
08/06/09
Excellent, vivid descriptions. I felt like I was right there in the middle of the scene.