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02/03/05
It would have read better if the anger was only directed at yourself, but then again, we tend to judge others the most for what we judge to be the worst characteristics in ourselves. A few spelling mistakes.
02/05/05
In 2003, Australia got THE best Australian idol - I fully agreed. But 2004 was really weird here. The judges were fine ... it was the people whose voting was bizarre. That's my 10c worth. A good opening example because it hooked those of us who are 'Idol' followers! If you ever get the chance to listen to our 2003 idol, Guy Sebastian, you're in for a treat! No anger there.
I like this article, but I agree with one of the comments you received that it would have read better if the anger had been directed at yourself throughout instead of being generalized at all Christians.

If you put a space between your paragraphs you will gain more readers. It is a turn off to see so many words bunched together.

My favorite line, "how ironic that what we cannot forget, God cannot remember." Overall a very strong entry.