The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice message, but a little abrupt in the change from the personal narrative to a devotional reading. IMHO, would have been nice to have drawn the characters more fully to get the reader "attached", then conclude with the devotional tie-in. :)
12/11/08
The creativity your MC showed was great. The reference to Mary being so far from family, riding a donkey and birthing in a stable, and tying it to how blessed your MC feels- very good.
You expressed truths and delivered a great message.
However, I too, felt the sharp turn from memoir to devotional.