The Official Writing Challenge
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08/21/08
Very well written, and very moving.
08/22/08
Wonderful story! I loved the climax.

A few edits in punctuation--especially commas and apostrophes--might help this out a bit.

It was great to read about this affectionate family.

Lots of clear and distinct detail letting us get to know the members of this family. Nice story content. Good job. :)
08/26/08
What a tender story! Very enjoyable!