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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Hide and Seek (08/07/08)
“You’re a bit delusional aren’t you? You’ll never find this guy. Everyone around here has been looking for him as long as I can remember.” The old man looked down with kind and understanding eyes and brushed the top of the youngster’s head. The stream eddied just in front of them and a few golden leaves swirled in the trap while the swifter water passed just a few feet beyond. They were standing in the shade, just out of reflecting distance, unseen by the unsuspecting trout.

“Well, mister, the way I’ve got it figured is somebody’s gotta catch him sometime or else the whole thing’s just a big myth…worse than that…a lie.”

“Whoa…wait a minute there partner. I didn’t say he wasn’t real, did I? I believe in him as much as the next fellow, but you’re an awfully small one to be taking on such a large task.”

Just then, the gentle babbling noises of the stream were drowned out by a volcanic eruption and out jumped the myth. Oh, it had to be him. Huge and shining like a rainbow for a brief instant, then disappearing like a gently-arched arrow of silvery flesh back into the depths from which he’d come.

For a moment, neither the young boy nor the old man said a word…they couldn’t. What they had just seen was proof of lore. The old fish…the old man…the one the old-timers called Hide. He was real. Now they understood. They no longer desired to catch him. Like the generations before them, they realized that seeking the myth was more important than holding and examining it. Hide was where he belonged and another pair who’d sought him could now pass on the lore and leave the seeking to those who did not yet believe.
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Esther Phillips
08/14/08
Just goes to show that sometimes what you're looking for is not what you're looking for...when you find it. Interesting story. Thanks for sharing it.
Patrick Whalen
08/14/08
Great imagery. I can see the two guys sitting there with there mouths open in awe and wonder during that silent moment!
Anita van der Elst
08/15/08
An excellent little piece of storytelling. Don't know if the author meant for there to be a sort of allegory but it made me think of how people think God is a myth because they haven't seen Him yet.
Marlene Austin
08/18/08
Succinct writing. Liked the title and the last line stating the lesson. Would have liked to have seen more words spent on the description of this legendary myth, after all, if he's a legend then he's earned the space. :)
gayle jackson
08/19/08
A fishermans dream...and very fishy story and I love fishing and I believe it too.
Patty Wysong
08/20/08
It took me a moment to catch what was going on, but I'm always up for a fish tale. This one was good. Good job.