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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Bridge (07/31/08)
Once upon a time there was a land called Izra. It was a lush green land covered by hills that rolled across the horizon like deep ocean waves moved over far waters.

The people of Izra loved their land. They were tradesmen and herdsmen who enjoyed living in peace. Their three priorities in life were worship of the Sovereign One, love of the family, and pride in their work.

One day an unassuming member of the people stood during the Sovereign Worship. He told the group three stories from their people’s long ago past.

“Travel back with me to a dark time in our people’s existence. They were enslaved, forced to do the bidding of those who did not know the Sovereign One. Until, one day, the Sovereign One sent a rescuer, who led the people from the Dark Land. They did not go unhindered. The Dark Ones followed, wishing to annihilate them. Our people were brought to the Great Water. They were frightened thinking they were trapped between the Great Water ahead and the Dark Ones behind. The Sovereign One created the Ground Bridge, which our people passed over safely, for He was the Maker of all things.” (1)

“At another time in their journey to locate this land of much promise, the Sovereign One provided the Bridge of Dry Soil over a Great Blocking Water. Our people were exceedingly happy to reach the Blessed Land and rejoiced over the Sovereign One’s Mercy.”(2)

“Eventually, more enemies desired the rich lands our people borrowed from the Sovereign One. They sent their hundreds of thousands in metal carts and gleaming coverings to overrun our peaceful land. This time the Sovereign One sent the Unexpected Bridge of Rain causing the land to suck their weight into the ground. Our people praised the Sovereign One’s Power.”(3)

“Today our people live in the time of a new history in the making. The Sovereign One sees our people’s need and has provided the Sovereign Sent. I will teach of the Sovereign One’s Love and lead you to the very presence of the Sovereign One. I will be the Bridge of Forever Life.”

The people in the Sovereign Worship were in awe. Some were in the awe of Belief, more in the awe of Fear. The Fear drove the people to be rid of this one who brought division, with suspected destruction.

“We must be rid of this one who speaks blasphemy of our Sovereign One,” a strong voice cried.

“Yes. He wants to be a bridge, let him be a bridge across the stream in the midst of our town,” another commanded.

Planks were brought and placed against the length and width of the Sovereign Sent’s body. He was bound and stretched across the flow of the stream. Fear trampled Him beneath the people’s feet. Those of Belief were forced to stand back and watch.

Once Fear had had its fill, Those of Belief were allowed to remove the Sovereign Sent. He was handled gently as He was taken to a place of peace. It took Those of Belief three days to prepare the place. As they joined to lay the Sovereign Sent into the Blessed Ground, those arriving latest heard a cry of groaning and sobbing.

“Fear has robbed Him. Fear has taken Him from us,” was the cry. As they grieved, there came a Presence of Calm among them.

Peering through their group, Those of Belief were blinded by the brilliant Presence of Hope. Quietly, the light was replaced. In its stead was the perfect form of the Sovereign Sent. His Healing Voice filled their minds. He told them of the abundance of things of which they would partake. He promised to leave the Bridge Tender to guide each of them continually to the Sovereign One. The Sovereign Sent told Those of Belief that they would be together again, by way of His Bridge to the Realm of the Sovereign One.

As He turned to leave, the hearts of Those of Belief were not heavy because they held the Bridge Tender of Comfort. Those of Belief lifted exultation to the Sovereign One for His Boundless Love.

As they looked to the direction of the Sovereign Sent’s leaving they saw His form shape into a Bridge, the Last Bridge the Sovereign One would ever need to supply.



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Allegorical references taken from:
(1) Exodus 14
(2) Joshua 3
(3) Judges 5:21-22
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Verna Cole Mitchell 
08/07/08
This is a masterfully written allegory.
Judith Gayle Smith-Owens Vitouswykegardinerclark
08/07/08
A wondrous retelling...thank you.
Helen Dowd
08/07/08
Excellent! This Allegory is spectacular. It sounds like a legend from a Native American culture...I found it most fascinating. Your theme of Bridge was executed supurbly, from Exodus to Christ, and His provision of the Bridge from death to everlasting life....I do hope this will be considered a winner. It is, in my books. But whatever are you doing in Intermediate? You should be in Advanced!!!!...Helen
Valerie Routhieaux
08/07/08
Masterful, spellbinding, a wonderful allegory of our Savior's love for us and how He bridged the gap in our lives. The references were not necessary, your work spoke for itself.
Heather Sargent
08/07/08
Very powerful! Fantastic and well written!
Joy Faire Stewart
08/11/08
Wow! Beautiful pictures you painted with words. You have a wonderful gift.
william price
08/11/08
Very, very fresh. I enjoyed it greatly. Thank you for entering this. God bless.
Shirley McClay
08/12/08
Absolutely beautiful. Well done indeed.
Joshua Janoski
08/12/08
I agree that this sounds like a Native American retelling of some famous Bible events. Definitely one of the more unique entries that I have read this week. Very well written. I appreciate you sharing it with us all.
LauraLee Shaw
08/14/08
This is a keeper for sure. Wow, you have a gift with this genre of writing. Extremely well done.
Lyn Churchyard
08/14/08
You have done a masterful job of retelling God's provision for man's salvation from an allegorical point of view. I loved the way you showed the two different belief processes ... Some were in the awe of Belief, more in the awe of Fear.. Great job Marlene, I hope this places.