The Official Writing Challenge
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06/13/08
What a delightful tale, skillfully told - and what a good start!
Excellent! Well written! This was very easy to read because it's so well told. Good work!
06/15/08
This was very well done - an engaging read, and very realistic. Good job, especially, with the interior monologue.
06/16/08
Good job showing this setting--the thoughts and prayers added a great deal.
I love how you portrayed the challenge of being true to faith in the midst of unbelieving family. It is a struggle that many of us face.

A couple of thoughts for future reference... The cabinet for alcohol would generally be referred to as the "liquor cabinet." Also, as you did well with through most of this story, action verbs engage the reader most. I might suggest then...
"Fabulous smells (wafted?) were coming from the kitchen."

You had me right at the table with your family. Nice writing!
Congratulations. I could feel your MCs tension-well done. The ending was perfect!!!