The Official Writing Challenge
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Genuine tear-filled hope. Congratulations.
This is a beautiful, passionate piece.
Very moving. I enjoyed the repetition and the descriptions. Almost poetic.
This was very beautiful, especially as it describes the life of the MC and his grandfather splitting and then ultimately coming back together again. Although several of the word-pictures were stunning, beware of describing to the point of wordiness. As a fellow level two-er I often fall into this trap, and it can ultimately be distracting instead of making a point for the author. There are just too many good words, aren't there??! Pity we can't use all of them. "Rosemary reds..." I liked that line especially :)
Wonderful story of finding a place in God at last. What a loving grandfather this must have been.
Wow! Beautiful images and descriptions in this piece. Your talent shows. Keep writing.
A beautifully written lament. Great take on the Topic, including a soothing Title. One tiny error near the end...knees become "weak"...not week; but I thought it a lovely piece, nicely done, and almost poetically written. Keep writing!
Congratulations, Jennifer, on placing 9th in your level with this piece. Great work!