The Official Writing Challenge
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Yes, yes, yes! to many of the ideas you have touched upon. If the world could only see "Christ in us, the hope of glory," we would be turning the world upside down, as the early church did. God wants that more than ever in our day.
12/16/07
Good job -- I like the concept of the "big C" and "little c". This reminds me of a quote attributed to St. Francis of Assisi: "Preach always; use words only when necessary." It seems the church does a lot of preaching but not enough living. Watch your grammar -- there's quite a few "then" rather than "than". Little details like that make the difference between a good writer and a great writer. You've got what it takes -- tighten up the loose ends! Great article! Christmas blessings! :)
This made me think of something our church recently went through. The thoughts are ones we should all heed. I see a couple of spelling/typo errors, but nothing major. All this piece needs is a little polish. You have some powerful thoughts here. Good job.
12/17/07
Lots of good stuff here--I'd suggest that you come up with a catchier title and an opening paragraph that'll really hook your readers. Once I pushed through the opening paragraph, I was quite involved in your article.
12/18/07
Agree with other comments about your depth of thought and perception here. You image of the Church as metabolic is powerful. You do need a grabbier beginning, though. I wonder whether the quotation could have provided that if you chose to use it earlier?