The Official Writing Challenge
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I couldn't wait to get a break to be able to read this. I was not disappointed. Oh to be a child again, for the benefit of completly knowing that Jesus does love me and not falling into all the adult traps.
Thanks.
11/02/07
Great job. I especially liked your last sentence:)
Laury
11/03/07
Very good. I like that line: "What I have learned by the children in Sunday school is to come just as you are, and receive who He is."
11/04/07
I liked the title but and the POV but not sure all the comparison was necessary especialy in paragraph two. Keep writing.
I loved the title...it drew me in to read the article. I noticed a few grammatical errors. The first is in the 2nd paragraph, 2nd line with it being their and should be there. Just the opposite occurred in the 4th paragraph, last line with it being there and should be their. Also in the 2nd paragraph is it self and I believe it should be itself. I enjoyed your article and also particularly loved the description of what children like in the 4th paragraph. Thanks for writing it and sharing it with us.
I love the title it really makes you want to read the article; and the green glitter in the ear is a lovely touch too. Well done.