The Official Writing Challenge
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Joseph is a servant of God and the teens are blessed to have such a willing teacher and example. God bless him (you?) as he serves God by leading this group.

I enjoyed the story as I have been called on to teach at the last minute and understand those feelings. You switched from third person to first person half way through. Perhaps this was on purpose, but I would suggest staying with the same POV in such a short story. I liked first person, but both work. Good job.
Very good lesson for us all. This might read a bit better if you made some of your longer paragraphs a bit shorter, and put spaces between your paragraphs. I enjoyed this!
Great storytelling. You made Joseph very likable, good characterization!. I echo the advice about the point of view and the spaces. You've got great potential, keep writing!
A good lesson here. Separating into more paragraphs would help. Also there are a few misused words that the spell check will not fing. (there instead of their for instance). This is easy to fix with editing. The message is very good.