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Good job of keeping the plot moving through dialogue, not an easy thing to do.
I don't know if George lived alone but I think so and thought I wonder who will be more blessed? The family for having a roof over their head or George for not having to be alone? Kind of story that made me think about the people in it.
The time frame in your article seemed as if it took place in only a few minutes and yet you managed to show the love of God and the love of a neighbor. Wow. I wanted to read more. I imagined the rest of the story, though. This was nicely done.
05/07/05
In a short expanse of time you have said so much and most of all you showed the love of God. Nice job.
05/08/05
I loved the sentiments. A bachelor being able to put together a nice breakfast for a family at no notice ... I'm impressed! (Okay, perhaps I'm cynical too.) A good lesson - all we have is God's and we're just stewards.
05/10/05
Great story, Zack, flows logically. Nicely carried by the dialogue. Believable characters.