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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the ROMANCE genre (04/19/07)
I would try and arrange my schedule to spend time talking to Jane. She loved many of the same things I did. We had many things in common and she became a fast friend. Laughter and conversation are what I most rememeber about our relationship. We shared stories of our families and our children.It was as if we had always been friends.

But her health continued to decline. The chemo was not doing it's job. I prayed with her and Matt. I prayed the same prayers I had prayed for Joe. She slipped away one night in her sleep without even a goodbye.

Matt was crying when he called to tell me. I cried, too. It was at that moment that God seem to speak to me. "You ask for healing. You ask for restoration. Both Joe and Jane are healed. They are restored. They are with me. They are complete."

In my sorrow, I shared what God was telling me with Matt.

Matt surprised me by reciting the verse in Romans that says "We know that in all things God works for the good of those who love him, who have been called according to his purpose."
"Let's hold on to that", he said.

So as time past it came to be that every Tuesday, Matt and I would volunteer together. He would continue to bring gifts each week and would give them to various patients that seemed to need a day brightener. It amazed me how he could get to know other people so quickly and perceive just what little something would bring them some cheer.

We began to spend a lot of our time together and he told me how he always knew just the thing someone needed. He said, “All you have to do is listen, People will always tell you what is in their heart”.

After many months, Matt and I were doing a lot of listening to each others hearts and so I should not have been as surprised as I was when he came to the cancer center with a large bouquet of red and yellow tulips (my favorite flowers) tied with a big red bow and a ring knotted in middle of it.

“ Will you marry me, Katherine?” “ I have grown to love you very deeply. I won’t ask you to give me your whole heart, I know that Joe still has part of it and always will. And you know that part of my heart still belongs to Jane”, he took my hand in his, but for the rest of my life all I have to give I promise to give to you, if you will have me”.

And one month later on a Tuesday the cancer center had a wedding and all the patients were invited.
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Jan Ackerson
04/29/07
A lovely illustration of how God can use circumstances for His purposes.

I'd have liked you to use all 750 words, and to clarify the relationships between these characters. I felt as if I were dropped into the middle of a story, and had to figure them out.

I enjoyed the final image of the wedding with the patients invited.
Dan Louise Mann
04/30/07
Jan's comment about using all your word limit spurred me check your word count. You had a cushion of more than 250 words you could have used to add a little more background. I think sometimes we are so concerned about compacting things down to not go over the word count, that we compact TOO much.

I felt like Jan, that I had to ponder a little to figure out who was who. And it took me until the the tulips to know for sure that the narrator was a woman.

Just a little rule of thumb (I have this written down to remind myself), that . and , go inside the " but : and ; go outside the "

Also in the next to the last paragraph you had the proper number of quote marks, they just weren't all in their proper places! :o)

Aside from those little things, I really liked the setting as an unlikely place for romance to develop, so all the more touching because of that. Keep writing. Kudos to you!
Jacquelyn Horne
04/30/07
Enjoyed this article. It has a lot to say in it. Some spoken, some implied. Good job.
sue moreland
05/01/07
I am the author of this story. I just want everyone to know that there was more to the story. I had 749 words, but I was talking on the phone when I entered it and did not realize I had not copied (highlighted) all of it so only the last part pasted. Live and learn, one thing at a time.