The Official Writing Challenge
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Very effective! It's a little slow moving at first, so the casual reader might not be patient to stay with it, but then, wow! Excitement hits like your tornado beginning with para 5. Tension builds, exciting phrases, kept interest. Loved the illiteration of dismal, dangerous, decimated! Loved "glued to the television watching red digitized blob of a storm swallow up..." great writing, love your "turn of phrase." I'm new to Tulsa and hope I don't get to experience this same excitement. Glad to hear things are going better in Canada and that you're feeling encouraged.
oops! Illiterate me! I meant to say Alliteration. (grin)
04/18/05
You do have some great descriptive phrases in your story. I like how you tie the dangerous tornado to the trials of your life and meditate on Jesus as your foundation. Nice article.
Well-written, enjoyed the humor about the cheap organ. God's love and care sure made an impact on you that first anniversary
04/23/05
It's stories like these that renew the faith.
04/24/05
Your closing paragraph is very powerful. Great testimony.