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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Volunteer (11/23/06)
He was grim as he watched the people rushing around on the street below. “They are so proud of their little achievements.” Shaking his head, he sighed loudly. “If only I could show them what it will be like if they continue to do things their own way.” Behind him his son nodded sadly, and he continued. “I have done everything for them, but they take the credit for everything I do. I give them food to eat or money to spend and they celebrate their ‘good luck.’” He raised his downcast eyes to meet those of his son. “If only they would listen, and leave this path of death and destruction.”

He began to pace. “I just want to help them, show them a way to live that will make them so much happier, but they just turn their backs on me. It has gotten much worse lately. If they continue on this path, they will end up destroying themselves. I can’t make their choices for them, but the ones they are making are all wrong. He walked again to the window and looked down at the people. Men and women rushed past each other, stepping aside to avoid the crippled man lying near the gate. “Something must be done; something drastic. I knew it would come to this, but it saddens me that the day has come so soon.”

His son stepped beside him at the window. “They’re not all bad you know. Some of them make the right choices. It will be hard, but I know it will be worth it.” He watched the people for a moment. Shaking his head as a small child who was begging for change was pushed aside to make room for an ‘important man,’ that was passing by. He continued, “When they have an option, many will make the right decision. It may be fewer than we might have hoped, but at least those who would choose it will have an option now.” He turned with a bright smile on his face.

His father couldn’t help but return the smile. “It is good that you love them as you do. If you did not care for them, this plan would not work.” He shook his head sadly; the men and women below seemed oblivious to the destructive paths they were on. “This is going to be painful for both of us.” He looked lovingly at his son, “I hate to ask this of you.”

The son turned to his father. “You do not have to ask, I volunteered. I will tell them where they have gone wrong, I know that I will find many who will listen to my teachings and will share our love with the world.” He looked back down at the people and continued, “and then, when the time comes, I will give my life to pay the price for their sin. And they will have the option to choose if they will accept my gift, or pay the price for themselves.” Smiling ever brighter Jesus said, “And then I will be by your side once again, waiting for the time when I will call home all that have accepted my gift.”
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julie wood
11/30/06
I loved the way the dialogue between God the Father and Son here is brought to life here! Also really enjoyed the specific descriptions of people observed, such as the child pushed aside for the "important man," and the mob stepping over the crippled person. Beautiful, original way of conveying the Gospel message and making it real for the reader!
Catrina Bradley
12/01/06
Ooh, my favorite volunteer! Great job with the topic. Good writing, too. You could have left out the "he continued"'s, and there are a few punction errors/typos, but did not distract from the message at all. Loved it!
Donna Powers
12/02/06
Excellent! I never thought of it this way but of course He volunteered. This is so wonderful. Very well done.
Leigh MacKelvey
12/02/06
I thought of Jesus as the first volunteer, but couldn't put it together in writing.You did it very nicely! I'm glad God used you to write it. I, too, enjoyed the descriptions of the people who were observed. I could see them along with God.
Betty Overstreet
12/06/06
Very interesting depiction of our Father. Your writing flows extremly well and keeps a readers interest right to the end. I will be watching for more of your writings
Betty Overstreet