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11/03/06
I really enjoyed this story! Imagery, characterization, and especially the narrator's feelings of homesickness and culture shock are all beautifully conveyed. I liked the unexpected twist of the ending too, as well as the overall message!
11/03/06
What I like - good opening, great story from an era we often forget. It kept my interest all the way through. Good dialogue.
What I might change - I might not quote 'straight home'. The transition to school again could be abit smoother. Very nice writing and storytelling!!
11/04/06
hope she knew how much you cared!
11/05/06
great story and history lesson! 1959 wasn't really that long ago, was it? Wonder if we truly can call ourselves a land of opportunity?
11/06/06
I have experienced this story....well, a bit of it. My father was from Louisiana, so each summer we returned. I always wanted to sit in the balcony but wasn't "allowed." That was for the "coloreds." They had rest rooms reserved for them, too. When I went into Woolworth's to order lunch with my cousin, I was jerked out of my seat. I was on the wrong side of the store. There, across the store, was an identical counter and stools, for "coloreds." I was only seven or eight, so I thought it was me who was being shunned! This was well told. I sighed as I read it. Even though I lived it, it still has the power to sicken me, thank God. Thank you for the shocking and painful, yet necessary reminder.