The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful story.Keep writing.
06/16/06
The last line sums it up nicely. Well done and a good flow, easy to read.
Beautiful. Very easy to read. I could see everything as if I was in the room with Nana, and I could smell that turkey, and see everyone around the table. Keep writing. This was very good.
06/21/06
Great imagry. I could see everything. The part about Ernie being "out of the way" jarred me a bit. Perhaps "occupied" whould have been a better choice of words. Overall though, I wonderful article with a great message.
06/24/06
Great work, Naomi! You do an excellent job painting a vivid scene. I enjoyed your story very much!