The Official Writing Challenge
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06/12/06
I see a good message in this, but found it a bit difficult to read as it seemed to ramble a bit. I like your references to trees, sap, and peace. And you're right, we don't listen often enough. Shalom!
06/13/06
Wanders a great deal. You might try an outline before writing. Watch the punctuation.