The Official Writing Challenge
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05/26/06
A very unique approach to the topic. With some editing for typos and watching your verb tense (says vs said), this could be even better. I'd also rewrite the first child's comments, it didnt't sound "young" enough, if that makes sense? One other suggestion I read somewhere, don't have more than one character start with the same letter, it's too easy to confuse them (you used a lot of A names). I really enjoyed this and could see it done as a skit.
05/27/06
Creative approach, Good job!
I agree, very creative twist! Sometimes all we need to find a little joy is just a little tweak in perspective. Keep writing!