The Official Writing Challenge
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05/27/06
Beutiful way to show joy! My only suggestion would be to minimize the number of times you use "The joy comes when" so things don't look so cluttered. Other than that, I liked this!
I have to agree. You did a good job, but you could have said a few less 'Joy comes when'