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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Start (01/16/06)
RIGHT FROM THE START

Right from the start you captured My heart.
I anticipated your shining debut

Cute fingers and toes and everyone knows
I’m simply mad about you

The sound of your voice I had no choice
But to respond in a silly coo

I have a plan for your life without any strife
Exciting and fulfilling too

Listen with your heart we’re not far apart
As you focus on things that are new

I’ll speak and you follow and every tomorrow
Will be fresh as the morning dew

You’ll not go astray if you follow My ways
And keep Me in your center view

You’ll note that you’ve heard I’ve given My word
As you eat it your soul is renewed

Your spirit will thrive and come fully alive
With this food sweet as honeydew

My love is forever, this you must treasure
My Spirit, you always pursue
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Marilyn Schnepp 
01/24/06
Lovely poem, but I'm still trying to figure if it is Mother and Child or something bigger; but the "coo" etc, makes me confused. Still, it is lovely...and a good job.
Carrie Lyons
01/24/06
.....its a riddle!


The main speaker is God!

These are fun to read.
Jan Ackerson
01/25/06
Good job with the internal rhyme scheme, and the end of all 10 couplets having the same rhyme. Very sweet poem.
Karen Heslink
01/26/06
I like the way this seems to shift from Mother speaking to God speaking. I love when writers bring out the feminine side of our heavenly father. Your rhyme scheme is amazing. The meter i the couplets misses the beat once in awhile. For example in couplet 7 I would leave our "your" and in couplet 8 I would leave out "it". To me, those couplets read more rhythmically with those words omitted. Thanks for a delightful poem on this topic!
Tony Rowsey
01/28/06
This is a very lovely poem. Written with great artistic flair that showcases your wonderful imagination. Very well written with a great rhyme scheme. This is a wonderful share. God bless.