The Official Writing Challenge
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01/13/17
A good message here. You need to 'show' rather than 'tell'. I think you tried to cover too much territory, easy to do.

Good potential. Keep writing, and let the Lord help develope your gifts in this area.

I enjoyed this - Trudy
01/14/17
Nice approach to the topic, good thoughts along with good message woven into this piece.

Great job.
God bless~
In your first Paragraph you have a line that leads us to the main point of your story: he didn't know what to do with his life. Many are like this but when it does come, it hits hard.

Some of the material in between is harder to follow or keep track of but overall, the point is well made - when it is time, we will know which direction we should strive for.

I liked the story. This could be an encouragement for those many who are in the same quandary.
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