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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: SKULDUGGERY (09/01/16)
I am a reporter for The River Eagle Chronicle. After the Light Force made their debut, foiling a bank robbery, and saving assorted people from death, I was assigned to discover who these people were. If they were real. I mean seriously, people flying and stuff. I don't do comic book movie reviews. But it was my job, so I became the paper's expert on these Christian Crusaders. Then I noticed something in pictures of these superheroes that people took. One of them kinda looked like my sister, Rebecca. So one night when she was out, I snuck into her room and set up a motion sensor hooked up to a light and camera.

It took me dealing with a boring pizza and movie date to get our paper's resident nerd to show me how to hook all that stuff up, so I hoped it was worth it.

I had been listening to the police scanner I had bought when I started my career years ago, and heard that the heroine called Mariness, the one who looks like my sister, had just turned some drunk boaters in to the cops. I activated my trap and made sure it was aimed at the window she kept unlocked. I left the door ajar so I would see the light if I was right and she came flying through that window. I was certain she had not snuck out the front door of our apartment, so the window was the only way for her to come and go.

I saw a flash of light from her room and rushed in to see her Mariness suit change into her street clothes. Why didn't I invest my money and my social life by setting up a video camera?

She looked shocked and asked, "Why, Larissa? Why did you do that?"

I felt like shouting in her face, "Silly girl, you superheroes are major news and how famous would I get unmasking one of you?" But I didn't, because I realized what a career enhancer this was going to be if I worked it right. So I calmly said to her, "I want to make a deal with the leader of the Light Force. I get exclusives on your Superheroics, and I keep your real identity a secret between us two and your teammates."

A moment of indecision crossed her face, and then she asked for a bit of privacy so she could call the guy running the team, Megawatt. I granted her privacy, because how was she planning to get out of my trap? Madre and Padre died years ago, so she couldn't go to them to complain about her mean big sister, even if they had learned her secret, which as I had to sneak around to learn it, was no guarantee.

Minutes later, two figures came flying into my sister's room. From my research I knew them to be Megawatt and Diamond. Now that I thought about it Diamond was about the same build as her boyfriend, Rex Brand. I was feeling kinda like Lois Lane in the Superman comics, where she was certain Clark Kent was Superman. I felt the same way about Diamond and Rex. So I said to them, "Thanks for coming Megawatt, and I'm guessing my sister's boyfriend, Rex."

The Crystalline hero looked ready to do something violent, so I tried to calm the situation down by saying, "Look, Rex... Rebecca with the knowledge of your secrets, I could make tons of money selling this info to a book publisher. But what good is money if I can use what I know to get exclusives on your adventures and make even more money selling my stories to the wire services? I'm not planning to put your real names on the front page if we can make a deal. What do you think Megawatt? Can I be the team's official publicist?”

He looked real thoughtful for a moment and said, "What about the rest of our team? Do you plan on figuring out our secrets to hold over us? Because if it is, the answer is 'NO'."

I reassured the Electrical hero that I didn't have the resources needed to track them all down and catch them without their masks on.

For that matter, I was only guessing about Rex. Was he being quiet because it was the truth, or part of a trick to get me too confident? Only time will tell...
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/08/16
Oh this is great. You hooked me right at the beginning and kept me to the end. I found myself grinning as I read this delightful story.

My biggest advice would be to show instead of tell. For example, this line:
The Crystalline hero looked ready to do something violent. Instead of saying it looked like that, show what it looks like. Did he sneer, raise his fist and lunge toward you? Create a mental picture for the reader.

I think you did a great job of writing on topic. I liked that you used the first person to tell the story too. That's not always easy to do. The ending was great. It left me satisfied and eager to read the next "installment."
Larry Whittington
09/11/16
There are many heroes today and someone has to write their scripts - Comic books, TV. A series is always popular - just ask the kids what their super hero is where they get to watch or read about them.

If you are their exclusive reports, what is their next adventure you will be reporting about?
Leola Ogle
09/12/16
Way to go. I love super hero stories. Good job. God bless.