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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: FIZZLE (06/09/16)
The dog that barks
makes its presence felt
it has a role in life
to guard and watch the night

The cat claims that
he is the master
of the house
feed him or he'd befriend the mouse

The oriole on the tree
outside my house
in the morning hours
wakes me up like the clock's chime

Butterflies keep flowers bright
Bees help fruit ripe
Fruit and vegetables
together support life

Sun radiates heat and light
Moon and stars lit the night
Clouds, rains, seas and oceans
shore against ruins of drought

Funny was it
if I lived my life
without reason or rhyme
Animals, plants, planets are Thine

Should I live my life
without hope or dream
Should I let things
run my life until their demise

I live in a frantic world--
fiascos won't have the last word
I refuse to fizzle
for I am a child of God

He is the Light that guides
and helps me see and move
For His glory I live
To Him I commit my life
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Member Comments
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Date
Leola Ogle
06/16/16
A sweet reminder of the purpose of life. God bless.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
06/17/16
This has a great message and tugs on my heart. Although poetry is not my strongest suit, I do have some tiny advice. I noticed in the middle you changed tense from the present to the past and back again. I think the present is more powerful in this case. The other is using the word that instead of who. I see God as a person so the line is more powerful like this: He is the Light who... (Normally, light would be that, but since you're personificaying it, I think who works better.) I love the line, I refuse to fizzle. It speaks volumes about our choices in this world. It's not always easy, but we can choose to not fizzle. I also liked the progression from dog to cat to bird and on. I felt it quite creative, and it helped reinforce your message.
Noel Mitaxa 
06/17/16
You've used some warm pictures to draw us into your world, and I like your final affirmation.
Bonnie Bowden 
06/19/16
Christ's light inside us never dies out even when we try to hide it.
C D Swanson 
06/22/16
A beautiful message!

Blessings~
C D Swanson 
06/23/16
Congrats Caleb!

Blessings to you~
Bonnie Bowden 
06/23/16
Congratulations, Caleb, on your highly commended poem this week in the Beginners category.

I think your poem would have placed higher if it would have been more directly tied to the topic this week.
Lea Austin
06/25/16
Congratulations on your highly commended poem.