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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: FINISH (05/26/16)
Why don't I finish what I start?
Distraction plays a vital part.
Today's the day to clean the house.
First I'll sew a button on my blouse.
These houseplants are starting to wilt.
I really need to wash this quilt.
I forgot to return that call.
To the curb this trash I should haul.
On and on this way it will go,
To reach completion is quite slow.

When the world the Lord did create
Six days, not early, not late.
Noah finished the ark it's true
Obeyed what God told him to do.
Joshua marched round Jericho
Not six, but seven times did go.
Joseph's life was far from pleasant,
With faith and honor, it was spent.
Paul met with much tribulation,
Finished race with celebration.
When Jesus on the cross did die,
"It is finished." was His cry.

It's good to finish what I start.
Finish it all and not just part.
To run a race, press toward my goal.
To do my best, that is my role.
Whatever course the Lord doth lead,
With joy I'll finish, yes indeed.
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Holly Westefeld
06/04/16
I know I can relate to being distracted.
It can be difficult, in poetry, to work the needed verb tense in to the rhyme scheme, but it just does not work very well to use the "did" before the present tense verb. Also, while you were pretty consistant with your syllable count in each line, the meter, balance of the stressed and unstressed syllables, was off in a few places. You might want to comb through Jan's writing classes on the forums for poetry topics. No matter how old the topic, she will reply if you comment or ask questions.
I like how you addressed this topic in verse. Keep honing your poetic skills. I'm not sure if reading other poetry would be of any assistance, but I write a fair amount of it, and several have received EC's this year. You would be looking for: "Replication;" "Bucket of Wonders;" "Ballad of Ones Beloved;" and "All Things New." I hope this is helpful...
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
06/09/16
This flows fairly smoothly. I'm not great at poetry, being tone deaf, I struggle with rhythm, but it seemed to sound nice to my ear. Some of the lines felt forced for the rhymes, but the more you write, read, and comment on Challenges, the easier it will be. One of the best tools is to critique others. It helps discover what does and doesn't work for you. Plus the more feedback you give, often the more feedback you receive. I enjoyed this light-hearted read. I can totally relate. I'm thinking about writing a line or two of it on my window to remind me to finish too. Nice job.
Bonnie Bowden 
06/10/16
Congratulations on placing highly commendable in the Beginners category.

I have such a difficult time finishing what I start, but I am trying.