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this would be a nice childrens story for the purpose of explaining about sacrifice.
Beautifully told! A unique approach that is very endearing. I loved reading this touching story.
01/10/06
Well done. Consider making this into a children's story. It has great possibilities as an Easter season picture book. Thanks for a refreshing approach to an explanation of sacrifice.
01/10/06
I am a bit confused in the first part as it seems to transition from Joshua asking about the sacrifice and screaming No! Then He pats Jacob on the bottom and screams run Jacob?

What a wonderful story! It certainly brings a fresh understanding of sacrifice. I agree...this story should become a children's book. Great job!
I loved it. A couple of areas need to be made clearer that they are something being said and just a general re looking over for punctuation etc. I agree that this makes a wonderful childrens story..I must be a big kid, because I loved it.
01/12/06
I got lost when you said that Joshua got caught in the thorns...I thought it was "Jacob" the little lamb. With all the confusion these mixed up names caused me, I still was enthralled with the story. It is a beautiful piece about our Savior's sacrifice for US. I really enjoyed it. Thank you.
01/16/06
Very creative approach (wish I had thought of it!) There's just that one name switch, which I have done too, especially when the names were close in spelling. That's no big deal. It is the STORY that is so precious. Good job!