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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: TOURIST TRAP (08/20/15)
Once we went to a tourist spot
where you find ancient castles dot
Along came some women and men,
they ran past us, announcing their 'gold rush '
scampering up the steps nearby
Sly was their scheme, soon we realised
they betted and baited; while we just gazed


To lure us, good luck they flaunted
Their easy wins, played like a game
away we moved as we weren't keen
While leaving we heard them utter
" These guys are smart; they weren't cheated "
Thank God, we saw through their trickery
for this isn't the right way to make money


Our story may sound trite or trivial
Truly we're part of God's big story
Our names are in His finest epic
When the whole story is revealed
we'll see the grand eternal scheme of things
Now in parts we see, one day we'll see Him
face to face; rejoice and embrace His wise ways
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
08/27/15
I like what you did with this poem. I immediately pictured Las Vegas or a street hustler. My main red ink would be aware of using the universal you. In this instance, I think if you had stuck with the first person, it'd have made it stronger and more intimate. I think you nailed the topic for sure. I also liked how you weaved your message intricately throughout this lovely poem. Nice job.
C D Swanson 
08/29/15
Great job and on topic. I enjoyed your poem very much.

God bless~
Bonnie Bowden 
08/29/15
Your poem does a good job of emphasizing Christians are not at home yet. This is just the first step into eternity.
Loni Bowden-Horn 
08/29/15
I liked the imagery of your poem. It shows how easy to chase after material things that make you feel empty after awhile. Only God can satisfy a heart and soul. Well written.