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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: First World Problem (04/17/14)
Poor Me

Of time I’m always running out.
Is this a reason I should pout?
Housekeeping will never get done,
Unless being homeless you are one.

What is the menu I should choose?
If your cupboards are bare, you loose.
I must find time to wash my car.
Some must walk, not matter how far.

These shoes my outfit just don’t match.
Some have clothes that aren’t worth a patch.
My friends don’t seem to understand.
Some have no friends who’re close at hand.

My family drives me up the wall.
Some have no family at all.
I wish my church was more aglow.
Some for their faith to prison go.

We can remember Job, of course,
And all his reasons for remorse.
Perhaps we really should not whine.
Our complaints may be out of line.

No matter what, God holds our hand,
Even when we don’t understand.
A sacrifice of praise is good,
Continually as we should.
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C D Swanson 
04/24/14
Powerful message packed into this poem! Well done.

God bless~
Robert Douglas Brown
04/24/14
You did an excellent job with delivering the message that the Lord put on your heart. The poem was easy to read and comprehend. A powerful message indeed.

God Bless!
Lollie Hofer 
04/25/14
Great message. I always have respect for those who are able to write poetry, especially rhyme, because it's something I don't do well.
Glynis Becker
04/26/14
I really liked the format of contrasting lines. Showed the topic well and was an enjoyable read.

For me there were a few places where the rhythm wasn't quite there and I think you meant the word "lose" instead of "loose", but other than that, no red ink from me. I enjoyed it!
Larry Whittington
04/27/14
Contentment no matter what we have would be God's goal for us.

I like the double rhyming words at the ends of each stanzas. I am sure this took determination. Keep up that work.

Todays world gives us many ways to grow in.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
05/02/14
This is really nice. It flows off the page and delivers a powerful message without being preachy. Tiny red ink is loose should be lose. I find an easy way to remember is you need to lose the extra o to get lose. I think it was a creative, light-hearted verse on the surface but has a lot of depth to it. Congratulations for ranking 6th in your level. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.