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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Winter (11/14/05)
“This is the worst blizzard in ten years,” the man on the radio spoke as Danny drove down route seventeen. He had never been on this rod before, and the blinding white of the snow pelting his windshield was causing him to creep at an extraordinarily slow rate. Great he thought, just what I needed. Danny pulled the vehicle over onto the shoulder and sat. There was no need in going any further, since he could not see more than a few feet in front of him. As the sun melted into the earth, and night began to show, Danny stayed put, listening for any news of a break in this storm. Night became day, and Danny awoke to find his car had run out of gas. Knowing it would only be a matter of hours before the battery died; Danny opened his door and exited his car. I remember a town a few miles back, Danny thought. If I can make it back there, I can hold up until this blows over. So Danny headed back the way he came, bundling up as best as possible, trying to fight the weather. After hours in the whiteness, Danny fell to his knees, strength escaping his body, and he cried. For sure, he would die out here in this winter, this horrid season that was taking his soul away, he thought about his brother. Jonathan was a Christian man, and for years had tried to get Danny to accept Jesus into his heart. Now, in this most dire time, his mind rushed back to Jonathan and Jesus. With his arms outstretched, reaching for heaven, Danny begged Jesus to find him, help him out of this mess. Feeling no different, Danny hung his head low, still weeping, and forced himself to his feet. He was going to find this town himself. Looking up in the direction of the town, Danny realized the snow was subsiding, and he could actually make out some buildings not even five hundred feet away. He broke into a sprint, while trying to wipe the tears of joy from his face. God truly had helped him, and he would never doubt his brother again.
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Nina Phillips
11/21/05
I liked your story. Few spelling errors, and would have been a little easier to read, separating paragraphs. Keep writing though-I seen a good story here.
God bless ya, littlelight
Jan Ackerson
11/21/05
You had plenty of words left--I'd love to see this story expanded. Show us his desparation, more of his attempts to survive, more of his internal dialog...even in this very short story, you made me care about him. A longer story (broken into paragraphs) would be a real gripper!
Helen Harris
11/22/05
Wow. I love this part:
“Danny fell to his knees, strength escaping his body, and he cried. For sure, he would die out here in this winter, this horrid season that was taking his soul away, he thought about his brother. Jonathan was a Christian man, and for years had tried to get Danny to accept Jesus into his heart. Now, in this most dire time, his mind rushed back to Jonathan and Jesus. With his arms outstretched, reaching for heaven, Danny begged Jesus to find him, help him out of this mess.”
Thank you for Sharing. God’s Blessing to you on the Win. Helen

Marilyn Schnepp 
11/22/05
Honesty first; due to no paragraphing - I dropped out early. Sorry! I may come back and try again...but I'm trying to read many in a short time.
Phyllis Inniss 
11/28/05
I can see the blizzard that Danny has encountered as his living without God. When he remembers Jonathan and Jesus, a light emerges and he is able to give thanks. Good story.