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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Minute(s) (as in time) (03/03/11)
Ever since I can remember the rules have always been different for me than what the rest of the girls had to follow.
When I was younger it was easier to accept as the norm for in my mind it had always been this way.
As I shuffle through those various recordings of the minutes in my mind, I see that it had times when it wasn't always a bad thing.
I was never expected to go through the painstaking phase of putting together an orderly bed like the others, I just pulled my blankie this way and that, and was pleased with the other's laughter, not realizing the reason at the time.
Even when it came to my toys I wasn't expected to put them away. But then I can replay the endless minutes of the others tossing my favorite duckie around and hiding it from me with a startling clarity.
And meal time always filled me with anticipation, everyone laughing and talking. The minutes ticked by slowly as I waited for their endless chewing to cease, and for me to get the leavings off their plates.
Now all of this could have gone on without me thinking too much more about it, except for one thing. One ultimate indignity. The minute I realized that my strange hairy little brother, didn't have to go outside during a blizzard to use the potty.
It's a dog's life.
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D.A. Urnosky
03/11/11
Nice twist to the story's end. Be sure to use comma's when necesssary.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/12/11
This is a cute piece with an interesting POV. I missed how it fit in with the topic, but I've had that happened before and then reread at and it dawned on me. Keep writing you have a nice sense of humor.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/12/11
I did reread it and saw you used the word minute several times and realized the flashbacks were of minutes, so it does kind of fit the topic but I think with more words, you might have an even better story. Keep at itm (also double-spacing between the paragraphs makes it easier to read):)
Verna Mull
03/13/11
Very cute piece. Had me wondering for a bit. Good job
Verna Mull
03/13/11
Very cute piece. Had me wondering for a bit. Good job
diana kay
03/14/11
cute little piece. the "voice" of the MC did not really seem bitter despite the title. i was wondering at first if it was a handicapped person but your twist was clever.
the dog seemed to be amused and perplexed rather than bitter.