The Official Writing Challenge
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10/25/09
I really loved this one! I think so many of us at some point in our lives have been in a similar place. Lonely, feeling unloved, etc...But, hopefully we all choose wisely. Great writing.
10/26/09
I really enjoyed the writing and the spiritual truth enacted by the engrossing "interaction" between Laura and the demon.
10/27/09
Philipians 4:8 a favorite scripture of mine. Very well done!
10/28/09
The lies that we believe often appear so subtle. Your writing gives us the opportunity to see more clearly that they really aren't always subtle.
10/28/09
Good one! I really liked the different fonts for the different voices.

Be careful of the difference between "it's" (with an apostrophe) and "its" (without one). "It's" means "it is", and shouldn't be used when you want the possessive (as in your first paragraph). You used it correctly a few sentences later. To remember the possessive, try substituting "his" or "hers"--no apostrophe.

The ending was great--the image of the little black cloud will linger.