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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Beginning and End (04/16/09)
It ALL Began in Paradise….

Adam, the ruler, the man of his home,
Called out to his wife, who sat alone.
“Honey,” he said, “you know I love you,
So why are you crying, why are you blue?”

Eve looked up with her beautiful eyes,
And said, “I don’t know, I don’t know why.”
Was it something I’ve done, though he knew it couldn’t be,
Because he was perfect….he was the man…couldn’t she see?

Adam concerned… but not overly so,
He had a job to do, so he had to go.
Adam left Eve, as she said “I’m Just Fine!”
So he said, “O.K. I’ll be home later to dine.”

Eve thought to herself and then quietly said,
“Dine? I’ll not cook or even make beds.
He needs to help me… for this garden is HUGE!”
So Eve took a stroll to calm her blues.

She walked and walked through their paradise,
It made her feel better, it made her feel nice.
But Adam on the other hand was fretting just a bit,
Eve said she was fine, but it just did not fit.


Then Adam realized… he had not helped keep Eden clean,
So he hurriedly picked flowers, hoping her eyes would gleam.
He ran through the forest calling her name,
“Eve”, he said…”I felt bad… so I came.
Here are some flowers and I love you so much,”
Eve just smiled and thought ….what a nice touch.

They walked hand and hand, feeling quite free,
Until Adam and Eve walked by a fruit-filled tree.
They looked at each other, for they had not dined,
Thinking those apples looked deliciously fine!

But lo, a serpent came out behind the tree,
And said, “These are wonderful…can’t you see?”
Eve was taken in by their beauty and smell.
She looks at Adam and says, “Do these ring a bell?”

Adam thought about what God had said,
And HIS voice was definitely in Adams head.
But, wisdom escaped him as he was enticed,
They looked at each other and took a big bite…

Well …we all know just how this story ends,
Man is NOT perfect and we’re all with sin.
God created a paradise….where He had us begin,
Yes, we had a beginning… and we shall have an end.
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Joanney Uthe 
04/25/09
Very creative poem, I like the take on the topic. You put a touch of the sinful nature in Adam and Eve before the fall which made them more real to us, even if not Biblically accurate. The last line is the essence of the whole poem and a great message.
Patricia Herchenroether
04/27/09
Not exactly how it went, but a creative entry.
Loren T. Lowery
04/27/09
You have a fine way with both words and meter and your poem has almost a song-like lilt and quality to it.
Suzanne Murphy
04/28/09
What a great whimsical way to point out the impact of the choices we make and the sinful nature of man. I really like the rhythm of the poem and the way it relates to how we live today. Great job. Keep on writing!