The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/08
Wonderful lesson! It is truly the Lord's hand that heals. I like the way you showed the young man's suffering as he stumbled through the sermon. Very well done.
02/14/08
Very good story. I liked how the preacher picked up and went on, asking God to intervene. That is right on topic! Good job! Keep on writing!
Laury
02/16/08
I really liked this story. I thought that the preacher would be in big trouble. The description of his sermon was great. I think your last paragraph didn’t quite fit, as though it needed to be in italics or quote marks to set it off from the rest. Your MC certainly spilt his milk. How great it is that God can come and pick it up again!
02/17/08
Good voice and pacing in this piece. The last paragraph seemed tacked on, in my opinion. Keep writing!