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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "A Man is Known by the Company He Keeps" (without using the actual phrase). (01/31/08)
“Thank you, Lord. I knew you could heal me! Look at me. Look at me. I am clean!” The man ran through the crowd so excited that he didn’t notice how the people quickly stepped aside to let him through so that he would not brush against them.

I can’t wait to see Sapphira and tell her how I, her husband, am once again complete! I have been made new. No more living as an outcast, no longer imprisoned in the colony, no further separation from my family.

Sapphira was brushing the dust from the stones in front of the doorway, when she heard the rushing approach of a man she thought familiar but couldn’t quite place.

“Sapphira, Sapphira!”

She recognized that voice, but this could not be Josiah. He was banished to the unclean cots of the Leper Colony. Her husband would not dare take the chance of infecting his family with this devastatingly incurable disease!

“Sapphira, I am come home.”

“At what cost, husband?”

“I am made whole. The Lord has cleansed me. Look at me, Sapphira!”

“Yes, I look, and I know not what sorcery or concealing salve you have used to cover yourself, but I beg you, do not come closer to the place where your children abide. Think of the children, Josiah! I know not what delirium or madness this abomination has driven you to, but you must stop, and go back immediately, before everlasting harm comes to this place.” With those parting words, she crossed the entryway, closed, and bolted the door.

Tears streaked down the unusually smooth face of this man who for years had borne the oozing, running sores on even the most delicate tissues of his body.

He stood alone at the closed door, his head bowed not only in prayer, but also, in dejection. “But, Lord, you have healed me. You have cleansed me. I don’t understand…”


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“Thanks, Chaplain. I mean, your sermons and talks have really helped me. There’s no way I would ever have gone to a church and found out how much God loves me. But, dang, I just don’t know how to thank you enough for coming to my Parole Board Hearing. I mean it’s only ‘cause of what you said that they’re lettin’ me outta this place. Just think, within the next twenty-four hours I’ll be huggin’ my wife and holdin’ my kids again.” In his excitement of seeing the steel-barred door opening wide for his escape, he rushed past the Chaplain, not hearing the farewell wishes.

All the way, on the long, much too slow, bus-ride home he had thought of all the things he wanted to say to Sharish. Now that he was only about a block away, he couldn’t think of any of those predetermined things. As he got to the driveway he saw her, his wife, getting out of the car. Sherry was getting some plastic bags from the back seat, when she saw him. He wasn’t sure which dropped first, the bag or her jaw.

“No. No! Joshua, what are you doin’ here? You ain’t supposed to be out for another eighteen months yet!”

“Hi, baby. Yeah, ain’t it sumthin’? They let me out early ‘cause of bein’ too crowded and stuff. And, I had this chaplain who said a few nice things about me. I ‘spose they figured I’d be less dangerous with just drunk drivin’ and attempted robbery than some of those mass murderers in there. But, hey, look at you. It’s been too long, baby.”

“Now, hold on, Josh. It has been too long! You cain’t just come walkin’ back in here like nothin’s happened. Joshua, think about the kids. I just got them started in a bran’ new school ‘cause lil’ Josh was havin’ so much trouble from those neighborhood kids. They knew where Josh’s daddy was and never let him forget it. And, now, you wanna, come back in here and ruin everything I’ve been tryin’ to fix. I don’t think so!”

“No, wait a minute, Sherry. I’m gonna be fine. That chaplain helped me a lot….”

“Oh, the ‘I found religion’ scam, huh? Save it for your next employment interview, Josh. If you’re gonna be fine, then my advice is to find a new home, in a new city someplace, to be fine in. Just leave us alone! I cain’t deal with anything else right now!”

As she walked away, he could only think, I don’t understand…
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Laury Hubrich 
02/09/08
This is different. I like the comparisons with the two stories. Maybe it would have been better, though, if you would have stuck to one and really filled it out. Just a thought... Good job! Keep on writing!
Laury
Beth LaBuff 
02/12/08
You have two very interesting stories. It might be just me, but they may be a bit of a stretch for this topic. (or perhaps "I Don't Understand" :) ) Regardless, your writing is very good with both of these. I was particularly drawn to your Bible setting entry about the leper. I can see that situation happending, since before Jesus came there were NO healings of lepers. So that wife "didn't understand" either. I really enjoyed reading your entry. Keep writing!
Shelley Ledfors
02/12/08
This is a creative and unique entry. I like the comparisons of the two stories...the Biblical and the modern, but both with the same outcome.
Jan Ackerson
02/12/08
Oh wow, this is good! I like the parallel stories, and I get the connection to the topic. You're a very good writer--I expect good things to come from you!
Loren T. Lowery
02/12/08
I don't think you'll be in beginners too long if this is any indication of your writing style and ability to tell a story. Simply great writing and the juxtaposition of the two parallel stories was not lost on this reader.
Sheri Gordon
02/13/08
This is a very good take on the topic -- I love the two different illustrations. The writing is very good, and the dialogue is perfect. Nice job with the topic.
Steve Bato
02/14/08
Wow! Sometimes the blessings of the Lord come with unexpected side affects, as you wonderfully illustrated. And you couldn't get much more on-topic! Great!
Maxx .
02/14/08
I think this works and is a great story. Very well done!