The Official Writing Challenge
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12/06/07
An usual take that worked well. We can learn from other's cultures.

I'm not sure if the verse you quoted fit in.
12/07/07
What an experience! I think you would have caught the reader's attention quicker if you started with the early morning description and then explained the circumstances.
This was an great experience if this is based on true life. Very similar to mine.
12/14/07
Congratulations on placing 12th in your level, Emily!