The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice twist here! I liked your MC, real and believeable. Try using a spellcheck next time before submitting though ^_^ a few times I was confused because I was trying to figure out what word you originally meant, such as "Finally" vs "Finely" Otherwise, I could see this branching out as a teen story!
07/26/07
This is a good story, many kids and young adults can relate. Even we old kids and look at it and say, "yeah, it could have been but God had other plans, praise God." Get a challenge buddy to read your material, a number of grammar and spelling errors. Keep writing.
07/28/07
Really good ideas presented in your story. I enjoyed reading about your character's experiences.
Very well written. I can see this in a Sunday school or christian men's magazine. It relaly spoke to me. You're right as we al have to learn to do what Christ wants and not just what profits us or our pride. It really is hard to move out of our comfort zone but Praise the Lord when we do because I know the Holy Spirit sure blesses us and Gos is proud of us, probably saying,:That's my boy!" or "That's my girl!". Amen. God bless you and keep on writing.+-Janice