The Official Writing Challenge
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11/09/06
This was a good article. Keep reading and writing everyday. I noticed that you left a r out when you mentioned bead for bread. Make sure you proofread carefully. I know how it is when you get so excited about writing. Also you reversed caused to me. I think you meant caused me to. You are very good at using descriptive words. Watch the length of your sentences. Good job!
11/12/06
A lovely and heartwarming piece. It really is a wonderful blessing to witness the "homecoming" of a believer. I was truly touched by this lovely story. Keep writing!
This was pretty good to read. I loved the ending best of all. Just a tip, a few more extra spaces would make it a bit easier to read :)
Good job though!