The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow. What a story. This was excellent writing. Congrats on a great job. This is very moving.
Very moving! I was confused at first, but once I got used to the back and forth, I was captivated! Having the "lamb" part in italics might make it easier to get into quickly; but, I literally was on the edge of my seat at the end.
10/16/06
Interesting and captivating. Very good writing!
10/16/06
I found the comparisons between the firefighter and the Messiah to be intriguing. But I was a little concerned about comparing a father seeking revenge to the Messiah as the Lion. Other then that, I like how you showed both sides of our Lord - powerful Lion, loving and sacrificing Lamb. Keep up the good work.
10/16/06
Your writing is without question first-rate. There are a few issues with tense switching, and I agree that setting the two contrasting images apart with the use of italics would help the reader. But this is very, very, very good, and I think you'll be out of Beginners soon. I look forward to reading more of your work.
10/17/06
Such amazing imagery!!! WOW
10/19/06
I am in awe. Beautiful, simply beautiful!