The Official Writing Challenge
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08/18/06
I really like the idea of all the different valleys, and this poem is strong in consistent rhyme and meter. Try to avoid the occasional forced rhymes and awkward phrasings. Thank you for this "spin-off" from Psalm 23.
Thank you. You expressed many of the same feelings I have when traveling those valleys.
This is very good. One thing, leave some white space between your valley's. It will be more effective and easier to read. Keep writing
You did a good job with rhyme and meter, and I admire your creativity. I agree that the poem would be easier to read in stanzas. Keep writing!