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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Abundance (06/08/06)
A soul and spirit there was, that God Almighty had for each of us. Some souls do not stay the same on the way to their frames. Spirit remains the same. On the way to same frame.. If you know this tomorrow it has happened today, this is the way to say it is in abundance today.
We want to tell you for a better way, come what may, we see a chance to say it now. Many children will be born, many will not understand what God Almighty attended for it's plan. If today we all can pray, perhaps this better way will stay for as long as needed today and tomorrows to come.
Have you heard of Gender Dysphoria, some children born of and some that have learned. This shows some difference that might help some learn. Eve Soul was tempted on the way, the spirit remained the same, then Adams Soul and Spirit remained the same all the way, until that one day when the Spirit of Adam was changed.
Yes Eve was tempted even before she was made, then on that fruitful day, sin was made. Then came Adam who made the choice to do the same, that very day . Neither different in God Almighty's view. No not me, not you. All have sinned this same way. Sin in abundance today, as God Almighty planned it that way. Eve was the beginning some will say, yet Adam also decided . One deceived, and one tempted, that you can say.
Some children will think they are gay, and some will be told that they are. Ironic as it may seem, can you tell which ones are made and witch ones will learn. Abundant today , please pray.
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Kim Thomas
06/16/06
I found this a bit confusing and somewhat disjointed.

You might consider the punctuation and pay careful attention to the phrasing.

Is it intended to be a poem? There seemed to be a few potentially rhyming phrases, but no flow.

I'm just not sure what the central theme was meant to be.



rose smith
06/17/06
Kim, thank you for your review. I am sorry for my poor scentance structure. Yet the message is of importance for today. So many children are harmed when they are this way. It is an out cry for children experiancing or living with Gender Dysphoria. Issues they face often with homosexuality. Many children could be he;ped if the parent understood some of the issue. The help of Jesus Christ helps me write these stories I have to say. I enjoy the poetic rymes, for me to see, and those that have the eyes to see as well. Thank you
Sherril Wendling
06/18/06
Bless you for your heart for the children! I can feel the poetic sense of this piece; why not try organizing it into poetic stanzas? That would strengthen your message and make it easier to read and understand. Thanks for sharing your heart!
George Parler 
06/18/06
You have a very important message that needs to be heard. As already addressed in the other comments, a little work on the structure with spacing between paragraphs will make it easier for the reader to focus on the message. Good job. Keep writing.