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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Prosperity (05/11/06)
The shaded areas from these fig trees are a welcome resting
place after having traveled so far .We are all covered with the reddish
dust of these Judean hills, as it clings to our damp skin.There is a
steady breeze, but it does little to cool in this heat. Jesus cups his
hands as I pour the water, being careful not to spill too much onto
the ground. He sips it, then wipes the sweat and grit from his face.
Hefting the jug , he pours for me, and I do the same.The water is
warm in my mouth, but has at least cooled our faces somewhat, as
the breeze evaporates it. Weary, I am relieved to accept his invitation
to sit here in this precious bit of shade.
The others, talking among themselves, and passing the water
jug, are beginning to settle in as well, under nearby trees and shrubs.
Their murmurs dying down, they position themselves to face him as I
have. Jesus rests against the tree and we all lean in, as he begins to
speak. I'm not sure that I comprehend all of what's being said and I
can see by the faces of the others, that they too, are amazed at his
teaching.
I lift my hair from my neck, as the breeze suddenly feels very
cool and refreshing. My throat, just moments ago, parched and
thirsting for more of that sun warmed water, now feels satisfied. He
pauses, gazing directly at me, and smiles. I know I have just received
something of that power we all had witnessed in Galilee. We saw
him heal so many, and I know he has just cooled my baking body
and quenched my thirst.
Though I am a woman, and own nothing more than the
garment on my back, this Jesus has welcomed me into his circle of
followers. I see in his eyes, that like the twelve, and like those in the
crowds that he healed, he loves me, like no one ever has. I also see
that though he seems to love us all the same, I know I am specially
chosen and set apart,for what, I don't know yet. So much is still a
mystery.
I meet his gaze and sense by doing so, that I am saying,
"yes", to I know not what. All I am really certain of, is that in this
moment, for the first time, I know what it is to have great wealth!
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Helen Paynter
05/21/06
Nicely written, good piece. Call me greedy, but I want MORE! I have lots of questions (and that's OK, because sometimed it's good to leave the reader with questions) but somehow I feel we could have had more. Good work.
Cher campbell
05/23/06
Wonderfully wrought! Can't believe you are in "beginner" category! : )
Keep up great work! Be Blessed, indeed; CHER
Jan Ackerson
05/24/06
Beautifully written! I suspect that you don't have more comments because this block of text looks difficult to read, without spaces. If you're typing in Word, don't indent (the FaithWriters gnomes will erase the indents). Just single space in block paragraphs, with double spaces between them.

Now that that's out of the way--I hope you enter many, many more challenges--this is wonderful writing, very atmospheric and personal.
Debra Brand 
05/25/06
Beautifully written, Patty. I felt as if I was right there in His Presence. Keep up the good work and God bless.