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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Love (04/27/06)
Is Love Just Another Four Letter Word


The sun flickered as the crisp morning air blew the bedroom curtains ever so gently. Katy opened one eye, then another. She stretched and yawned and pulled her blanket up to her chin. She loved her somewhat worn college blanket and no matter the wear or the years she just couldn’t part with it. As shadows from the weeping willow danced across the room she smiled. Birds were chirping, dogs were barking, and lawn mowers were beginning to be heard all over the neighborhood. How she loved Saturday mornings waking without an alarm and slowly rising to meet the day. No plans, just whatever her heart desired. First I think I will have pancakes, I just love them with hot maple syrup. Walking into the kitchen she looked out of her bay window and admired the distant mountain view. How she loved that old window and what lay beyond. Cup of coffee in hand and the morning paper stretched across the kitchen table she began to read the latest news from her little corner of the world. She had lived in Revere her whole life. No city life for her, she loved the quaintness of a close knit community. She loved the people of Revere and she loved the hometown familiarity.
The phone rang. Now who would be calling on a Saturday morning?
“Good to hear from you. I love you, “she said as she hung up the phone.
“I love you too,” her sister echoed and then click.
Short phone calls were nice. She loved being able to say what needed to be said and then get off. A typical Saturday morning just the kind she loved. That was until…

“Katy…”
What?” She jumped spilling her coffee and searched the room for the source of the voice that knew her by name.
“Katy I love you!! And I miss you!”
“What? Who is there? What kind of prank it this?”
“Katy I placed the robin outside your window this morning and woke you with a cool breeze. In college I helped you find you favorite old blanket under the bed before you moved out…”
Interrupting the voice,” Now I know this is a ruse, I found the blanket on my own, there was no one around. But, uh, then how did you know?”
“Katy I made the mountains you admire that lay beyond your window. I chose this town for you to live in before you were born. I know the number of hairs on your head and the breaths you have taken.”
“Okay now you’re starting to sound like a stalker. If you don’t show yourself I am going to call the police.”
“Katy I love you. Katy, you have a lot of love to give. But I have not heard you say you love me in a long time. Why is that Katy? Why don’t you talk to me anymore?”
“How can I say I love you if I don’t even know who you are?”
“Katy you accepted my gift of love and salvation thirty years ago in Bible School. Throughout your young years you called my name when you were scared, hurt, hungry and tired. I watched when you graduated although you did not invite me. I held you up when your father died even though you blamed me. I grabbed the steering wheel when you almost hit a tree and you called it luck. Katy you know me.”
“God?”
“You do remember my name.”
“Yes Lord, I’ve just been so busy. I guess I just thought you knew I love you.”
“Katy you did not even recognize my voice. When your sister called you knew her voice. My love for you is so great that I sent my only Son to die for you so that we would never have to be apart. And you didn’t even know me.”

Katy awoke to a robin singing. Confused in the first moments of wakefulness she wondered if she had just been dreaming. Rubbing the sleep from her eyes she realized she felt different inside. Katy now knew what her heart desired. Dream or no dream she got the message. All that she loved had been given to her by her Father above. Hmmmm, pancakes sounded pretty good. She was starved. But first she had better clean these coffee stains from the kitchen floor. Coffee stains? Once on her knees she began to pray; the coffee stains could wait.
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Virginia Gorg
05/04/06
Cute the way your worked coffee stains on the kitchen floor to get Katy on her knees for God. Nicely done.
Lindy Jones
05/06/06
Wow! That was such a powerful piece of writing. Keep it up... I was captivated from the first sentence!
Doreen Hammond
05/07/06
Very good story. You might try and put some spaces between the paragraphs and conversations for easier reading. Great message, one we should all think about. keep writing.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz
05/10/06
Good job. I liked that she was ready to let the coffee stain wait for something more important. Watch the spaces between the paragraphs. It makes it more difficult to read.
Edy T Johnson
05/11/06
Some writers might preach at their readers, telling them only the part Katy heard God say. But, by writing a real-life story and making the message part of their conversation you created a simply brilliant read. I think I'd like to live in Katy's small town, too! :)
Jessica Schmit
05/11/06
I'm impressed! You did a fabulous job on thies piece. My only suggestion is that you break up the paragraphs a little more and my the main character's thoughts in italics, so the reader doesn't experiance any problems in the flow of your story. That said, well done! I really enjoyed the ending!