The Official Writing Challenge
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04/28/06
Beautiful writing, although I am a bit confused. Who is the narrator, how does he come to be in Russia? At first, I thought she was taking him to a gathering of Christians, worshipping in secret under communism. Perhaps the word limit cuts this short of revealing all you want to tell. To be continued....?
05/01/06
It seemed as though the point of view shifted throughout and so was abit confusing but still very beautifully written! I think there is so much in this piece and shows a lot of skill. Would it have been possible to add some dialogue to break it up some or would it have ruined the mood? Just a thought:)
I agree with the two reviews above. The point of view is a bit confusing.

But, you have an excellent gift for language. The last half of your story is excellent.

The first half was harder to get through. But, powerful stuff, nevertheless.