The Official Writing Challenge
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03/14/06
Nice story. I liked it a lot, in part because I think I was able to relate to Regina...with the "voice like a mouse" and all. And it helped me to think that being quiet is OK, and that I can still make a difference.

I thought it was well-written, too. I especially liked the line, "Even today, if I close my eyes and concentrate a little, I can walk through it all again, like an invisible man in a long-lost Atlantis."
03/14/06
Liked that opening, especially the ice cubes melting.
03/15/06
Wonderful story, written with a likeable, believable voice.
03/16/06
This was wonderful. You're really a very good writer. I think this could have been in intermediate. Your story pulled me right in. Nice descriptions, characters I really cared about- not easy to do in 750 words. Good job.