The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/06
You did a great job of sustaining the musical metaphor throughout your poem. I like the rhythm that you established early, with alternating long and short lines--that faltered a bit toward the end, though. Really nice effort, I encourage you to work with the ending a bit more.
03/13/06
I hope you keep writing these beautiful poems. They are very touching examples of our worship and prayer lives from the heart of one that loves the Lord. Very sweet Music Of Life..I think about all the music that we hear throughout the day, sometimes joyous, meloncoly,sad..your poem remind me of how we dance (live) throughout the day along with the music being played. God bless ya, littlelight
03/14/06
The ending phrase needs to be a little longer. The rest was beautiful, it lifted my heart today. You are an inspriation!
03/15/06
What an interesting way around the prompt!

This does read like a song!

Good work.
Very well done.
This is one of the best poems I've read lately. Really wonderful. Thank you!